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 <dd> <p>The UK Parliament is divided into two. </p>
 <p> On one side is the House of Commons where your MP sits; on the other is the House of Lords. Proposed new laws have to be considered by both Houses.</p>
-<p> MPs are, of course, elected by the nation. Lords, on the other hand, become members through a complex mixture of appointment, religion, hereditary entitlement, and self-election
+<p> MPs are elected by the nation. Lords, on the other hand, become members through a complex mixture of appointment, religion, hereditary entitlement, and self-election
 (<a href="http://www.parliament.uk/business/lords/whos-in-the-house-of-lords/members-and-their-roles/how-members-are-appointed/">more details here</a>).
 </p>
 
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@ <h2>House of Lords</h2>
 
 <dt><a name="why"></a>Why write to your Lord?</dt>
 
-<dd><p>Well, they may not be elected, but they still get to vote on, debate, and amend the bills that will affect us all when they become law.</p>
+<dd><p>They may not be elected, but they still get to vote on, debate, and amend the bills that will affect us all when they become law.</p>
 <p>You might write to a Lord to tell them about something you think they should care about.</p>
 <p>Or, if a topic is soon to be under debate, you might provide information that will go towards forming their opinion on which way to vote.</p></dd>
 
@@ -45,7 +45,7 @@ <h2>House of Lords</h2>
 <dd>
 <p>The main section of WriteToThem asks you to type in your postcode, so that we can match you with the people who represent you in your constituency.</p>
 
-<p>With Lords, it’s different. You may contact any Lord, so how on earth do you choose?</p>
+<p>With Lords, it’s different. You may contact any Lord, so how do you choose?</p>
 <p>Our <a href="/lords">Write to Your Lord</a> section tries to solve this issue in a few different ways:</p>
 
 <ul><li><p><strong>Method 1</strong> Find a Lord who has a special interest in your issue.</p>
@@ -54,9 +54,9 @@ <h2>House of Lords</h2>
 
 <p>Or, if your issue strongly relates to location, try the ‘find a Lord with an association to this place’ facility.</p></li>
 
-<li><p><strong>Method 2</strong> If your topic is of general human interest, then you might want to make use of the "Random Lord" button - which does exactly its name suggests.</p>
+<li><p><strong>Method 2</strong> If your topic is of general human interest, you might want to use the "Random Lord" button, which does exactly what its name suggests.</p>
 
-<p>Believe in serendipity? Use the ‘Find a Lord who shares my birthday’ button, and find out whether your matching horoscopes also mean that your opinions align.</p></li></ul>
+<p>You can also use the 'Find a Lord who shares my birthday' button to find a Lord with the same birthday as you.</p></li></ul>
 
 <p>Whatever method you choose, don’t feel you have to pick the top Lord: you can follow the links to read a bit about what they’ve said. </p>
 
@@ -77,8 +77,7 @@ <h2>House of Lords</h2>
 
 <dt><a name="how-does-it-work"></a>How does it work? Do you have all the Lords email addresses?</dt>
 
-<dd><p>Not yet! For many Lords, we send your message to the House of Lords central
-email address, as the majority of peers don’t have offices.</p>
+<dd><p>Not all Lords have individual email addresses. For many Lords, we send your message to the House of Lords central email address, as the majority of peers don’t have offices.</p>
 <p>From there, it will be conveyed to your chosen Lord by the House’s internal mail systems.</p>
 <p>If you are a peer yourself, and would prefer to receive messages directly,
 please <a href="/about-contact">contact us</a>.</p></dd>
@@ -89,7 +88,7 @@ <h2>House of Lords</h2>
 href="http://www.parliament.uk/business/lords/whos-in-the-house-of-lords/get-in-touch-with-members/">different ways to contact Lords</a>, and the different limits on sending bulk messages to
 all Lords.
 
-<p>We also very aggressively prevent you from sending duplicate messages to Lords. This
+<p>We also prevent you from sending duplicate messages to Lords. This
 is because the House of Lords throw away bulk sent messages, so it is a waste
 of time. </p>
 
@@ -104,12 +103,7 @@ <h2>House of Lords</h2>
 <p>That said, we believe that most politicians are actually decent people trying to do their best. So in short, while they don’t <em>have to</em> bother, if you take the time to compose a decent letter, there’s a better chance that they will.</p> 
 </dd>
 
-<dt><a name="lords-reform"></a>Do you have a Lords reform agenda? What do you think about an elected reform?</dt>
-
-<dd><p>Hah! Like we’ve got time to think about things like that with
-<a href="https://www.mysociety.org/projects/">all these pesky democratic websites</a> to run.</p></dd>
-
-<dt><a name="when"></a>When should I write to a Lord, instead of, say, my MP?</dt>
+<dt><a name="when"></a>When should I write to a Lord instead of my MP?</dt>
 
 <dd><p>There are various reasons you might want to write to a Lord.</p>
 
@@ -125,11 +119,9 @@ <h2>House of Lords</h2>
 contacting them isn’t always useful or satisfactory. Contacting a Lord instead
 may be a better way to influence policy.</p>
 
-<p>Or, of course, you might just want to ask them what they do, or what they
-think about something. Whatever, write to them: they’re <em>your</em>
-Lords.</p></dd>
+<p>Or you might simply want to ask them what they do, or what they think about something. Write to them: they’re <em>your</em> Lords.</p></dd>
 
-<dt><a name="can-i-help"></a>This is great &mdash; how can I help you guys?</dt>
+<dt><a name="can-i-help"></a>How can I support WriteToThem?</dt>
 
 <dd><p><a href="https://www.mysociety.org/">mySociety</a>, the charity
 who built and maintain WriteToThem, are always in need of <a